Emailing draft

I'm not sure if Simon has received any of my last emails, I haven't received any from him in the past month - they keep pinging back - not useful. Managed meet with a friend of my fathers though Michael Ryan, works for Handmade Productions. He read the script for my fifth episode and I gave him the outlines for the others. He liked them. He did give me feedback on the episode.

• The first scene between Claire and Danny went on for too long
• Certain scenes didn't flow correctly
• The introduction of DS Morgan needed to be subtle
• Make DS Morgan angry at the fact his son is being used.
• He would be angry at being asked to wait before going to his son's aid.

All of these I have to agree on, now that I read it back it is the weakest of all 6 scripts.